Rather than consume TB2000 server space, please allow me to post a link to my essay:
Making It Plain
Thoughts?
Making It Plain
Thoughts?
bw
Fringe Ranger
Needs more punch in the opening - a couple sentences that make your point and say where you're going. As it stands your reader is sort of wandering sideways, wondering where this is going.
The point of your post appears to be the last sentence of your al-Baghdadi quotation. Start with that.
The point of your post appears to be the last sentence of your al-Baghdadi quotation. Start with that.