Comments for Escape From the Rat Race
- Thread starter Fleataxi
- Start date
I'm enjoying the story, 'cept for a minor quibble: there's a bit of redundancy in the supper scenes. You described how the fish was fixed on the previous night, so there's really no need to repeat it for the second night. What caught my eye was the idea of letting the lard cool to re-use: "Yeah, we know he keeps his lard already!"
As to the whole story, "I wish....."
--Rich
As to the whole story, "I wish....."
--Rich
Coleslilwitch
Inactive
Sounds great so far! I'll add my wish to being off in Alaska, too!
"Roy thought he was even busier than when he was just surviving. He was right."
I suppose living in some type of comfort is w-o-r-k!
Is Roy gonna have some troubles? I ask because while carpenters say, "Measure once, cut twice," for me it's more like "Measure twice, cut three times!" so it seems unrealistic to me that his building is going up so easily. (Is there a "banged thumb" icon?)
--Rich
I suppose living in some type of comfort is w-o-r-k!
Is Roy gonna have some troubles? I ask because while carpenters say, "Measure once, cut twice," for me it's more like "Measure twice, cut three times!" so it seems unrealistic to me that his building is going up so easily. (Is there a "banged thumb" icon?)
--Rich
nightbird762
Inactive
it seems to be better than the first one
RVN11B
Contributing Member
Im not much of a critic when it comes to stories so bear with me. First off, like others here, I really am enjoying this tale. In fact I get exhausted just keeping up with him in my mind. LOL. Secondly I too wish to point out the redundantcies. It is apparent in my mind that this is to reinforce the concept of safety practices in these situations. Over all good job!
Finally, please do not take offence since I do not intend for any to be givien.
I personally am not a religious person. I respect those who are. I feel that simple references to specific scriptures would suffice rather than lenghty quotes.
Be that as it may, Im looking forward to the next installments eagerly.
Finally, please do not take offence since I do not intend for any to be givien.
I personally am not a religious person. I respect those who are. I feel that simple references to specific scriptures would suffice rather than lenghty quotes.
Be that as it may, Im looking forward to the next installments eagerly.
ChemicalGal
ChemicalGal
Hi Flea Taxi
As always your stories are so real. I read North to Alaska last night and really enjoyed it.
Finished this one today....great sequel. I am hoping he gets one of Olivers pups for the winter....he needs a friend.
CG
As always your stories are so real. I read North to Alaska last night and really enjoyed it.
Finished this one today....great sequel. I am hoping he gets one of Olivers pups for the winter....he needs a friend.
CG
Fleataxi
Inactive
AEA: Thanks, these stories were originally written for a different audience, mostly Christian Survivalists with several people who were curious and seeking, so I included whole verses of Scripture throughout my stories. This is the last book that uses whole sections, so you won't have as much to read. One of my stories that is already posted here, Route 666, is really heavy on Scripture, but the subject matter is the End Times and the book of Revelation told from the point of view of a Christian man on the run from TPTB and trying to survive the Great Tribulation.
Of all my stories, these 3 (NTA, EFTRR, Route 666) are the most overtly religious. by the 1/3 mark, it tones down again for a while.
Fleataxi
Of all my stories, these 3 (NTA, EFTRR, Route 666) are the most overtly religious. by the 1/3 mark, it tones down again for a while.
Fleataxi
please tell me there will be more chapters!!!!
Fleataxi
Inactive
Beardog1: This story (and the sequels) have already been written. I'm posting them here at TB2K for the reading enjoyment of TB2Kers who didn't read it on the original forum, or people who did, and want to re-read them.
Shameless Plug:
If you want to buy your own copy of all 23 of my stories, plus 45 stories from Tired Old Man, in Adobe Acrobat PDF format on 1 CD, see my advertisement in Swaps and Sales, or PM me for further info.
10% of all proceeds goes to TB2K.
Fleataxi
Shameless Plug:
If you want to buy your own copy of all 23 of my stories, plus 45 stories from Tired Old Man, in Adobe Acrobat PDF format on 1 CD, see my advertisement in Swaps and Sales, or PM me for further info.
10% of all proceeds goes to TB2K.
Fleataxi
Tired Old Man
Inactive
Very good, but I've read it before. How many times has he read that Bible of his? Either he's a slow reader or he's trying to memorize it. I know what's coming next and can hardly wait.
Fleataxi
Inactive
Tom: He's applying what he's reading to his daily life, and sometimes we just need reminders. It's not like we're studying for a test - we're reading stuff that reminds us how much God loves us, no matter how bad we screw up, and if we accept his free gift, and let him run our lives instead of trying to run them ourselves, we get to spend Eternity with him.
Fleataxi
Fleataxi
Glad to see you posted more chapters today! I needed a rest from the BS.
I always cry at weddings! And my heart skipped a beat when I read that Anne screamed the same time Oliver leaped and Roy shot.....I was afraid to read the consequences re: Oliver, etc. Nothing like getting into a story....
I always cry at weddings! And my heart skipped a beat when I read that Anne screamed the same time Oliver leaped and Roy shot.....I was afraid to read the consequences re: Oliver, etc. Nothing like getting into a story....
Fleataxi
Inactive
Bamma:
I'll try to post every 2-3 days depending on read count. I like to add at least 100 reads between posts so I know everyone read the last installment before I post new stuff.
I wish we had a bigger word-count per post limit. Right now, it's set at 6,000 words per post. On some of my bigger stories, that's 1 chapter's worth!
Fleataxi
I'll try to post every 2-3 days depending on read count. I like to add at least 100 reads between posts so I know everyone read the last installment before I post new stuff.
I wish we had a bigger word-count per post limit. Right now, it's set at 6,000 words per post. On some of my bigger stories, that's 1 chapter's worth!
Fleataxi
Flight-ER-Doc
Inactive
Flea, I know you have the whole story (and the follow-on) already written....
SO JUST POST THEM!!!! The delay is making people
SO JUST POST THEM!!!! The delay is making people
Fleataxi
Inactive
nannygoat:
Thanks!
Sorry I forgot to keep posting chapters.
What does it take to get people on TB2K to coment to my stories? over at Frugal's where I originally posted them, I'd get dozens of replies per chapter. Now it seems they're more interested in reading than posting.
Fleataxi
Thanks!
Sorry I forgot to keep posting chapters.
What does it take to get people on TB2K to coment to my stories? over at Frugal's where I originally posted them, I'd get dozens of replies per chapter. Now it seems they're more interested in reading than posting.
Fleataxi
mitchjohn42
Inactive
Fleataxi
This story is really good. It's refreshing to read something that shows the good in people instead of all the rotteness we hear about. Good work and thank you.
mitchjohn
This story is really good. It's refreshing to read something that shows the good in people instead of all the rotteness we hear about. Good work and thank you.
mitchjohn
thank you - thank you - enjoyed the new chapter very much - remembered part of the story when you posted it before but you either reposted more stuff or I just forgot a bunch - what ever I do not care - i am enjoying the story - please do not forget to post as often - hard for some people to remember when the story gets back on the list and not as obvious - thanks again
SheWoff
Southern by choice
Flea,
I got to tell ya, you are one talented writer. I got so into this and other stories you were posting on here that I snuck over to FS and read Allakaket Airlines and Are the Kids Alright?. WOW!!
LOL I must have read straight through for a couple of days....they are really great!!!
You deserve wayyyy more comments on your stories...
She
I got to tell ya, you are one talented writer. I got so into this and other stories you were posting on here that I snuck over to FS and read Allakaket Airlines and Are the Kids Alright?. WOW!!
LOL I must have read straight through for a couple of days....they are really great!!!You deserve wayyyy more comments on your stories...
She
Tired Old Man
Inactive
FT,
We all deserve more comments on our stories, but don't hold your breath. Enjoyed rereading this. Thanks.
We all deserve more comments on our stories, but don't hold your breath. Enjoyed rereading this. Thanks.
nightbird762
Inactive
thanks fleataxi it just gets better and better.i'm so glad that oliver was not to badly hurt and i boy too.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
you are an AMAZING writer fleataxi! i just CAN'T WAIT to see what's going to happen next!
gee, wouldn't it be GREAT if the kid grew up to be a BUSH PILOT!?!
gee, wouldn't it be GREAT if the kid grew up to be a BUSH PILOT!?!
SheWoff
Southern by choice
you are an AMAZING writer fleataxi! i just CAN'T WAIT to see what's going to happen next!
gee, wouldn't it be GREAT if the kid grew up to be a BUSH PILOT!?!
Or be smart enough to end up owning his own airlines????
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
uh FT, i didn't read ahead...i helped WRITE it...remember? 