Comments for The Carpenter Papers, Volume 1: The Approaching Storm

The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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Well, with some fear and trepidation, I'm posting the forward for something I'm working on. It gives you enough information, I think, to form an opinion on whether or not you'd like to read more.

I'm also posting this at another forum I frequent with the same purpose in mind.

Let me know what you think. If opinion runs good, I'm going to aim for 1-2 chapters a month--but no guarentees. :D

Whether you like it or not, thanks for reading and for your comments.
 
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Jenncw

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I'd like to read more. It is a different approach. I've always loved to read Diaries and Letters, especially from the War Between the States era, so I think I'll enjoy reading this. Keep posting!
 
The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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It rained today

So here's Chapter 1, fresh off the press. I may have to do some more editing, as I usually like to let these things sit for a while before saying "I'm done".
 
The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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Well, it isn't going to be all diary, or even mostly diary. The diary entries are just a device to let me set the tone or the scene for a chapter. I hope that ins't too big a disappointment. :D
 
mbabulldog

mbabulldog

Has No Life - Lives on TB
Well, it's raining like all get-out here in NY (as of 22:15 hrs, we're reading 5 1/4 inches since yesterday afternoon on the raingauge), so I've taken some "me time" to catch up on my fiction. Let's say this, I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Bulldog
 
Christian for Israel

Christian for Israel

Knight of Jerusalem
you're writing is top notch and the story seems to be a good one. i believe i'll learn a lot from reading this and look forward to the next chapter.
 
cabinboyman

cabinboyman

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And my addiction to the fine story telling here on TB2K continues. Nice story, and I am looking forward to more. Do you plan to cover 300 years?
 
The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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I may eventually cover most of the period. I'm working on that million words Jerry Pournelle said an aspiring writer needs to write before they should worry about getting published. That works out to 8-9 normal length novels. With that much to work with, I think I can at least cover all the fun parts.

Just as an FYI, Chapter 2 is underway; probably about 25% done. I hope to get it up before next weekend, but I have to travel out of state for work this coming week, so that may slip.

Thanks for all the kind words. I'm glad that you're enjoying it.
 
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bobaloo

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So far some of the best "fan" writing I've seen, none of the usual spelling and grammatical errors which I must admit really hinder my enjoyment of a story (too many years editing a magazine).

Keep up the great work! (Really, these first couple of chapters are of publishable quality)
 
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ofuzzy1

Just Visiting
Great Job! Really enjoy the construct.

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Anne saved her work and logged off the computer.

Should be Sarah as Anne is the baby now taking a nap ;)
 
The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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Actually, I have a bet with myself over how many chapters I can write, without destroying the story line, before letting you know the outcome of Sarah's GSW. :dvl1:

Actually, I plan on starting chapter 4 today, time permitting. The return to standard time means I have a lot more indoors time, more the pity.
 
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Deena in GA

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Wow! Excellent story!! You do know now we're going to be hounding you continuously for another chapter, right? ;)
 
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seraphima

Veteran Member
Good tight story, well written, but, oh, how much I want to find out if our heroine is safe or not?! You get the cliffhanger award!
 
The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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Chapter 4 is up. It's a little longer than any other, but I felt it needed to be this length to get to a good stopping place.

I probably won't have another chapter for you in the next week or so. The weather here is nice, and I have a lot of things to do outside before the weather turns not nice.
 
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gardenlily

Contributing Member
Great chapter! It saddens me that Sarah had to die but I have learned to be a little more cautious because of this. I am a trucker's wife and am home alone most nights. It has really made me think before going outside after dark and now I double check my doors and windows before going to bed. Also have my gun by my bed now. Keep up the good work. Your writings are not only entertaining but also thought provoking.

Dianna
 
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RiJoRi

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Great storytelling! I, too, appreciate the good spelling, and correct punctuation. (My bugbear is "it's" :rolleyes: ).

My MIL lives in Stokes County, NC, which is quite close to (next to?) Yadkin County. We're heading there from here in NY this Thanksgiving.

Should I watch for Cambos? ;)

--Rich
 
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wasabell

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Still waiting patiently for the next installment.

Great writing. Good style, and grammer. Punctuation is good, too.

It has me very interested..
 
The Freeholder

The Freeholder

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Well, at long last, Chapter 5 is up.

Fair warning--I'm not completely happy with this chapter. I knew exactly what I wanted to write, but the chapter itself resisted being written. I made a lot of false starts and did a lot of rewriting. Given that, I'm really looking forward to seeing what you all think.

Thanks for the previous kind words on grammer and punctuation. I was an English major for a time (before I figured out that business and computers paid much better, and that I was better at them), so I'd better get that mostly correct. I'm really interested in what people think about the story, the characterizations, pace, believability, etc.

Happy Thanksgiving to all my devoted readers. Both of you. :lol:
 
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Deena in GA

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{I'm really interested in what people think about the story, the characterizations, pace, believability, etc}

Personally, I think you do a great job in all these areas. I find myself caring about these characters already and that's a good thing. ;) The only "problem" is that you don't post chapters often enough. :D

And, trust me, there are many more than two people reading this and checking back constantly to see if anything else has been posted.
 
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ofuzzy1

Just Visiting
Freeholder,

Great job.

Even though you're not happy with the way your last chapter worked out, I'd say it flowed the way it need to.

Odd how the keys get push in the correct order regardless of your intentions.

Thanks for your efforts!

Fuzzy
 
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